2015考研英语画图作文三大“作死”型写作盘点

　　The picture highlight a focal social point, that is, friendship and communication is indispensable.(错误1)To begin with, it is not only

　　beneficial for advance of a nation, but also essential for development of a

　　person. (错误2)What is more, it (错误3)can teach people treat others with sympathy, sincerity and love. Still, it can help people obtain more opportunities in the competition and achieve themselves in the prospective career. Last but not the least, it will certainly exert positive influence on sustainable development of society.

　　点评：虽然考生在上述段落中用了一些难词，比如indispensable,

　　essential, sympathy, sincerity, 但是得分仍然不高。从语法单词的角度看，这篇文章的错误似乎并不多，但是文章将主题句写成了friendship and communication is indispensable，可是2008年文章主题是“合作”，考官阅读时肯定会有一种文不对题的感觉。这篇文章告诉我们，如果考生在没有看懂题目的情况下就开始写作，即使写了象indispensable这样的“大词”，语法结构也没有错误，只要是文不对题，考官仍然会毫不客气地给出低分。因为看不到合作(或者那么是合作的近义词)考官就会立刻失去耐性，认为你根本就没看懂题目，他“失性”、你“猝死”。

　　建议：这个考生的写作基础其实并不弱，背得也不错，但是他拿到文章之后，没有通过题目中的文字暗示判定写作主题，而是很随意地按照自己的想法，而不是文章的主题词写作。其实这个同学只要明确文章的主题“合作”，然后把句子重新组织一下就可以了，具体写法如下：The primary purpose

　　of this picture is to show(套话要少写)that a growing number of people have come to realize that cooperation is not only necessary, but also indispensable for one’s career.(首句用“重要性”的句子点题,) As a

　　result, they increasingly stress the fundamental role of cooperation in their career(延伸句1) By doing so, they can improve working skills necessary for their prospective career, gradually fitting into a competitive society and carving their career. (延伸句2) Still, cooperation enhances mutual understanding between people, thus providing them with mental comfort as well as spiritual back-up.(延伸句3)To sum up, intoday’s world, nothing is more important than cooperation (尾句要和主题呼应，可以换写和“重要性”有关的句子，做到首尾呼应，中间展开。)

　　3. 写作错误太多的“小刀割死”型：这部分考生一般都能看出文章的主题词，但是通常把主题词写在段落的结尾、2)喜欢只写一些和主题无关的背景类型信息。这样的框架处理方法，就使文章的主题词和其相关的内容相割裂，迟迟不能和主题挂接，越不会写吧，越写、可是越写吧、越不会写。逐渐进入“原创”后，语法错误无数、拼写错误无数。考官没读两行，就产生一种“跳跃”感，感觉这个考生总是前言不答后语，句子之间不能相辅相成。

　　阅读以下的这篇文章：

　　China has rapidly developing in recent years. According to the economic datas by the government, our country has changed stronger than before. So with it followed there area phenomenon called “China hot” in many other countries. that is, foreigners are popular with tralve to China, wearing traditional Chinese costume, eating Chinese diet, even learning Chinese and Beijing Opera. However,is that the picture tell us? Certainly not. The American girl is not onlywearing a traditional Chinese costume but expressing Chinese traditionalcultural sign. furthermore, this picture above does convey a truth that the national culture is international culture, and that is easily to understand.

　　这个段落的首句为China has rapidly developing in recent years. 可以说，当这位考生写了这句话的时候，离低分也就不太远了。也许你觉得我说的有点“危言耸听”，但是这篇文章在阐述段的开头位置写“中国发展快”，这本身就远远地脱离了文章写作的中心。这样这个段落就成了证明“中国经济发展快”，而不是“民族文化、世界文化“了。这篇文章最为致命的一个问题就是：二段用引言句开篇(“中国经济发展快”是个被广大考生写“烂”了的引言句，这样三句话写完了都没有出现文章主题词。

　　此外，该段的语法单词错误过多。大家可以自己找找看，这个小段中有多少单词、语法、句子结构的错误呢?

　　建议1：建议考生将主题词前置到二段段首，用“重要要重视”的写法开篇，然后用先熟悉万能意思框架，然后选择最明确简单的关联词即可，注意以下的文章写法：on the one hand, on the other hand, by doing so, 这样的连词形成中间段引申的粘结，尽量多写和文化交流有关的句子。然后用“这种做法会造成积极/消极影响”的写法结尾。 The primary purpose of this picture is that cultural exchanges are not only necessary, but also indispensable, so we are supposed to emphasize their role in a country. One the one hand, they will invariably enhance friendly ties between countries and improve their mutual understanding between peoples. Onthe other hand, they can promote communication between people in these countries and remove the barrier between them. In the long run, the cultural exchanges willexert positive effects on the sustainable development of world civilization.(结尾句中的sustainable development虽然有些老套，但是如果主题词前置，延伸句层次清晰，并不很明显，反而和exert positive effects相组合，形成了合理的结论。)

　　结语：

　　战场上，新兵和老兵的区别是，新兵该胆大的时候胆小，该胆小的时候胆大;而老兵则相反，该胆小的时候胆小、该胆大的时候胆大。考生第一次考研，多为新兵，如果这个考场就是战场，进入战壕之前，记不住那么多交战法则，那么只要记住以下三点就足够了：

　　1) 简化段落层次，少套话。

　　2) 第一段描述和第二段阐述的延伸部分要具体些。

　　3) 尽量减少拼写和语法错误。第三点其实反而不重要，因为语法拼写的错误多只是表象，根源在于考生的搭配不合理，表述不流畅。随着框架结构的简化、以及对常用说法的归纳整理、加上反复练习，相当一部分的拼写和语法错误也就慢慢消失了。